Wednesday, October 5, 2011

Revision Revised.

I've shortened, extended, and condensed.This is what I've got:


The premise of this story is that addiction is a personal attempt to seek self-satisfaction and fulfillment.

 The scene opens up with an average middle-aged man taking notes as he masturbates to pornography on the Internet. He is taking notice to the positions and aspects that make up his fascination. It was not about the sex at this point, it was more about the fantasy. He ignores his pleasure as an addiction and becomes obsessive about his notes.He has been married for ten years but their sex life became dull.

 The inciting incident includes the finding of his notes by his wife. He was able to hide this private life until he is shamefully hiding behind his wife's back because she was furious.  Despite his wife, the main character continues to seek self-fulfilling pleasure. The main character starts to become careless and then seeks new ways to experiment with his fascination. While trying to free himself, he tries to find other like him. He finds a database of people who seek out different ways of sexual pleasure induced by ones’ self.

The climax involves this man trying to make this blog his masterpiece of his personal pleasure experiences to share to others. He then tries different methods. While reviewing an article about auto-asphyxiation and he wants to try it and take notes. This man dies in the middle of his orgasm realizing how pathetic his search for happiness was. 

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